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Post by itktdf on Oct 23, 2007 0:55:37 GMT -5
Koolies
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Post by Sitara on Oct 30, 2007 21:44:47 GMT -5
I'll give this a try. ^-^
The moon's light shined threw out the openings in the clouds, that fell to the lands before the foothills, like shattered glass. The air was crisp and cool as stratus hugged the mountains. Looking over the land, among the dark is a white arctic wolf sitting on top a tall bolder. Sitara's mind was flowing with questions, with a blue strip below each eye and a marking she knew nothing about on the left back leg that's two light blue strips over lapping each-other around a big yellow dot. As the sound of rain scattering the land, falling from broken clouds, a large dark shadowy figure watching Sitara from a ways behind her. Softly calling her name, ~Sitara~.
not that long, but it is a try. XD
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Oct 30, 2007 22:03:37 GMT -5
Im not sure if you were just trying any beginner starter post but remember that this is a feline roleplay forum. Its OKAY to practice with a canine but just remember that when you do rp here, it has to be a feline. (Make sure you post your character profile in the character roster before rping.) If you dont have any characters or dont want to make any, theres some up for adoption in the character loan section.
Now onto the rp post!
You are going to want to add more to it. Starter posts are usually suppose to be the longest. So after the shadowy figure called to her, how did she react? What was she thinking about? Perhaps let us know a little bit about her past if you cant write a lot in the rp post. Is she scared when her voice is called? Is it real? Or is it imaginary? You could definitely develop this into an awesome post if you add more about how she reacts to this figure. Also, maybe even add who it is and why they are calling to her. Stuff like that ^^ You are free to add more and repost for me to comment on again. ^^
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Post by Sitara on Oct 31, 2007 0:09:30 GMT -5
Well, this is what I need to learn after all. ^^ thank you for the info. and I was not sure if I should of asked if this was for felines only before hand. it's okay. just need time to make a new character. ^^
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Oct 31, 2007 17:07:42 GMT -5
^^
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Post by Sypher on Nov 23, 2007 19:38:13 GMT -5
Could u check this over for me Kie? Don't hesitate to correct me Lurking in the shadows in the cold frosty night, Sypher had just begun his trek down to the deserted savanna for his dinner. He trotted on silently, his breath puffing up white wisps of air. The sky had almost blackened, but his visions already adapted to the darkness, having always hunted during the night. He had no families to tend, nor a pride to protect. He was a loner, always shying away from others. He never learned responsibilities, he never had one. He never even looked upon the young female lioness, he was never interested. He gazed about the scarce land. Then suddenly he caught a movement in the corner of his eyes...
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Nov 23, 2007 20:39:33 GMT -5
Perhaps continue on a little bit more about where he's coming from and what he sees? Like make it a whole big scene. Maybe the movement was a rabbit and he tries to hunt it. Just try adding more to it. But its a wonderful start! You have a really good knack for it!
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Post by Sypher on Nov 24, 2007 2:27:40 GMT -5
Okay I'll drag it on a little longer x)
Sypher narrowed his eyes and lowered his body, ready to attack. A silohuetted animal stood still, sensing danger. Sypher crept closer to his prey, making sure his paws land silently without a sound. As he approached closer to the prey, he noticed that he would have a big feast tonight, for it was a larger animal than usual. At the silent moment, Sypher took a leap at his prey, his claws extended, but was surprised to meet the same. He wanted to step down from the fight, but the other side kept clawing and biting into his flesh. He tried to defend himself, but it was relentless. Sypher finally attacked and struck the animal where it would end the fight. His claws ran through the animal's eye. Sypher stood staring down to see who he was fighting all along.
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Nov 24, 2007 3:15:53 GMT -5
Moreeee. Let us know who it was XD
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Post by Sypher on Nov 24, 2007 18:49:29 GMT -5
=O fineeee it was a sheeeep! xD okies I will continue further with it then ^^
Sypher stared down at a panting lion who looked about the same age as he was. He was black all over like he was with a pair of lighter blue eyes. His muzzle, underbelly, and paws were light gray and the hair tuft was orange with a strange marking on its back. (((char is already made up but not posted in the character roster))) Sypher took back steps as the fallen lion pulled himself up. Sypher lowered his body, preparing for a fight. The other lion did not show any sign wishing to engage again. Instead, he drew his claws in. "I...didn't know you were a lion," he began, but Sypher was already disgusted with him. "I thought you were a prey." When it occurred to him that Sypher was ignoring him, he continued, "I didn't know lions would be out hiding..." Before he even got to finish, Sypher cut him off, "And what were you doing late out at night?" The stranger narrowed his eyes. "I was kicked out from my pride and decided to go hunting for food because I was hungry. Is that a problem??" Sypher turned to meet his blue eyes. "Fine, I'll let you off with that, but it still doesn't explain why you are here." Sypher felt he shouldn't have been too harsh with a younger lion, but he couldn't go back on his words.
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Nov 24, 2007 19:11:46 GMT -5
Ohhh nice. XD The only thing left to add is have him leave the lion or the lion leave him. That'll leave an opening for another rper to come and join.
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Post by Sypher on Nov 24, 2007 19:48:58 GMT -5
Okay =D
Sypher was having an emotional battle withen himself. Should he allow this male to come join him and live on this deserted land? No, he thought. I've always been a loner and there were no problems with that. Allowing him to join me might cause problems. One must go he thought. He looked over to where the male lion was sitting just couple feets from him. But he couldn't just send him away where he wouldn't be accepted anywhere, like him. "Fine, you stay here." Sypher muffled under his breath. The young male was startled by the way he spoke. "But I'm leaving," Sypher turned his head toward the green savanna far away where he was once rejected. I should probably go and see what's changed over there anyway, he thought to himself. The young male was baffled but didn't say anything. As Sypher started his way out of this place, the young male watched him go...with an evil smirk on his face. As Sypher neared the green land, he was already feeling unwelcomed. The bad memories he had when he used to live there flowed back to his mind. However, his legs made him kept going. It was almost evening again, the sky already turning navy blue and black. The stars were shining that night, the first time he has seen them since he lived here. Sypher looked around the large land and found a tall stone standing in the middle of tall grasses. He made his way over there and settled down, curling up, his back leaning on the stone. He rested his head on his paws and stared silently at the stars, wishing something wonderful would happen at least once in his life...
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Nov 24, 2007 19:49:55 GMT -5
Now THAT is one hell of a starter post. Add all those paragraphs together and you have one amazing post O.o;;
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Post by Sypher on Nov 24, 2007 19:59:40 GMT -5
LoL Thankkk you Kiee *tackleglomp* Am I really suppose to put them all together and repost it here?
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Post by Jackie Santiago on Nov 24, 2007 20:04:35 GMT -5
No I was just saying you can use all of that for an rp to start off on the forum. Like in Orion. You combine all that together and post it there XD
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